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Story Dame Valerie Adams

We were getting ready for my first ever commonwealth games doing shot put when I got there I felt so nervous after all the training and fitness I have done so  I  guess I have to do it after all Iv'e done till this day. The time is here and i'm in the games  against Australia So hard as so I thought I can do it I can do it I threw and got further than Australia I I can't possibly believe I won Every body cheering woo  Valerie, Valerie, I  was wrong I guess that taring to concentrate and to be confident really payed off after all.

Dame Valerie Adam's genially

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Fact file

Hi it's Zion-li from Room 22 here is my fact file about Dame Valerie Adams. .

Book Week

Hi I'm Zion-li from Room 22.

I wasn't  any thing but I wish I was Hermione from Harry Potter.

It is a girl she is very smart and a Wizard. 

I found book week fun when we have to stop drop and read and how we have to dress up on Friday.

My favorite book is the Dog Man series i've  Read 3 of his books. lots of people dressed up as Harry Potter.

Sick sentences Dame Valerie Adams

These are Sick Sentences
I flew threw the air. Their were people watching from the stands. I hit the ground



Here are my new sentences.


Quickly throwing my black shot put and shifting it higher and higher until I finally threw it as high as I can and seeing me winning. Thousands of people observing Dame Valerie Adams throwing her big black shot put. Solidly hitting the hard floor with yellow sand and making the win of the night.

Show not tell sentences

Ariella-Brooke felt Happy:
show: Ariella's mouth opened wider then a vampire smiling at some one when really he wants to suck her blood.



Rachael felt shocked:
show: Rachael's eyes widened like someone opening there mouth to eat.And hearts Racing like a toy train.



Ava felt sad:

show: Ava's face tilted in on the side and cried with her eyes closed and she was swimming in her own tears.